Malala Yousafzai is a Pakistani girl who
was shot by one Taleban for defending her studying rights. This attack
had been happened about two weeks ago, when she was going to her house and suddenly
she was shot by an extremist Taleban, after the prohibition for girls to assist
to school.
Regarding my personal opinion, these kinds of attacks
are unacceptable and it must be prohibited in all cultures, like it is
prohibited in my country. It is not logical to shoot a person who defends his
rights or simply defends his ideas, and whenever she is one girl who wants
to study.
In the same way, I sincerely think that Malala
Yousafzai is a very bold girl; she wants study over her possibilities. This
attack which has received Malala has touched everyone in the world and this
helps us to open our eyes and to not think in a secondary problems, like what
kind of phone we have.
To sum up, I want to emphasize that it should be
prohibited to use the violence against the ideas or events that each person have.
And I am successful knowing that Malala will be having one education which she
always wants, because she is going to remove to Europe
to study.

Hey Leire,
ResponderEliminarPretty good, although some word choice and verb tense problems (i.e. "has been happened" = "HAPPENED two weeks ago").
I agree that this kind of incident puts into perspective the stark difference between "FIRST WORLD" and "THIRD WORLD PROBLEMS".